翻译了吸精女妖的婚礼歌,有没有高手来指正一下
Her skin of silk, her eyes acharm,
1 Q Z: n4 M/ z' |+ o1 i: ^Her voice of glass, her flaming hair. D# o \' R: e3 u! Y
I sense her lust, she means me harm, . {! b* H( S E
My heart is hers, I do not care.
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! @+ J/ p7 d; Z6 `, ASing, sing, in love I sigh
) |" k% g1 Z4 [* U5 @% |Without her touch, I’’ll surely die. , @; s5 T: g$ [/ b' U7 d0 H+ [
Weep, weep, my death is nigh, ' ?2 f' e' s' X9 y
And by her lips I die. , s7 }$ M/ P9 V8 t( m# K6 w
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My heart is ice, my tongue is stone,
$ e0 _8 V% f+ x3 Z* B9 WMy blood runs cold, my spirit fled.
6 o; }, _+ Z! M5 e+ j2 ]8 `Dead fields of joy where salt is sown, ( ^8 P+ L: U2 Y6 W( _8 Y- Y
My love has gone and left me dead. * H+ E# @ w# G! W' ~, S
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(Shrewd的翻译:
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3 C& r1 Z% M# e0 t8 s' }8 [% z她丝绸般的肌肤,她媚惑人心的双眼
; S) C3 |- \: z/ o1 ?9 f3 t6 D她碎瓷般的声音,她光彩照人的秀发3 E8 r7 ?4 Y7 v7 ~! M& w
我感到她的欲望,她抓住了我的要害# p" O/ n+ Z. n* |
我的身心完全属于她,不过,我不在乎( o0 U" l/ Q4 b. k k* ~$ K
6 j$ v( o( A* f' M' O3 j% `* Y3 w唱吧,唱吧,在热恋中我却叹气
7 e7 |" T( A- Q# L7 `3 y若得不到她的触摸,我必死无疑! ?& |5 E- M: l- M4 g9 N0 C
哭吧,哭吧,我的死亡近在眼前
0 @' D l3 T$ ?( u1 Y( l7 b而她用接吻杀死了我6 }, ^9 J* i: S5 \; A/ J2 L" m" ^
' K! W8 @" k; b$ G, \+ H心渐渐凉若冰块,我的舌头僵硬如石头
7 p7 @$ P) Q: W: Q5 b# f5 S血在血管中冷却,而灵魂早已离开躯壳; ?* G. P, W; }
在那个欢乐就是往伤口撒盐的死亡之地
: C3 G6 E7 \" ]+ y% R1 E[或者:那遍地是盐的荒漠就是欢乐的死亡之地?], X* V* k9 @6 U/ p! N1 A* L/ H
我的爱离我而去,只留下具空洞的尸体)